This is fail on many levels. It is a rewrite of They Keep Killing Suzie, my favorite season one episode, as some kind of soppy thing where Gwen becomes immortal. It ignores the fact that Jack and Gwen have no established relationship beyond flirting, and makes them in love. They are indicated to have no established relationship in the fic, either. They're just in love for some reason. I won't deny the sexual tension in the show, but I will deny the in love thing. And the fic adamantly ignores the fact that Ianto propositioned Jack at the end of the episode, in favor of angst! Everyone is OOC in here, especially the now kind, and understanding Owen, and Jack, who spends the whole time crying. Gwen is also really dumb for some reason, in spite of the fact her character is actually rather smart. Dense, sometimes, but not dumb. Sigh, this is bad fic though. Made e laugh almost till I cried, and cringe.
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